STIS: Is this a gramatically correct sentence?
Posted by
Strongbad (aka Rambler14)
Nov 30 '11, 12:49
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By contract and simple fairness, the Grady Health System can only recover funds from Fulton County the internal auditor confirms have been used to provide services to eligible Fulton County residents.
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Responses:
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hmm
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Beryllium
Nov 30, 12:53
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"...that the internal..." -- nm
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Spawn
Nov 30, 12:51
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"have been" is passive voice, "were" is better -- nm
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jingle pixie
Nov 30, 12:51
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More like two clause (not Santa) pretending to be one. -- nm
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the liioulu with whatever
Nov 30, 12:51
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yes, but I'd change it to "that the internal auditor" for clarity's sake. -- nm
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Reagen
Nov 30, 12:50
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"can only recover funds [xyz] *that* the internal auditor..." -- nm
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Max
Nov 30, 12:50
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*ahem* It's ... complicated. I think it could be refined to be easier to read. -- nm
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Beryllium
Nov 30, 12:50
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I'd put in a "that" for readability, but I don't think there's anything technically incorrect in there. Awkward, fo sho. -- nm
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TFox
Nov 30, 12:50
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Fuck me. -- nm
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Beryllium's Eyes
Nov 30, 12:49
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